Rate these freestyle bars on 1-10 (PLEASE)?

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    I posted this earlier, but more people are online now
    one being the worst, ten being the best: rate it 1-10
    I came up with these randomly. three seperate sets of bars. Imma finish the best one:
    Bars#1:
    There aint no such thing as bad people
    just mistakes
    dont get me wrong there can be snakes
    karma works slow on them
    but, dont worry that Bych will be controllin them
    givin them what she owes them
    like ????? (tryin to come up with a similie)
    Bar set 2: So if life’s a bit*h
    and Karma is too
    are they freinds, are they cool
    or at each othes necks
    can’t wait to wreck each other’s plans
    is that sh*t scams, or 100% real? (unfinished)
    Bar set 3: Is it possible
    that life is just an illusion, the maya
    and things become clearer when you get
    higher and higher
    finally, you’ll come back dowh
    don’t remember what you heard or sound
    or what you found… out
    mind’s headed south (unfinished)
    which one should i finish, or should i give it up? be as blunt as you want. i need the truth if i suck. anything i can improve on? any tips
    I’ve only wrote like 6 verses EVER, so yeah, im prety new to this

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  • #364265
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    its k i guess

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    Im personally thinking a 5. aint good aint bad. Lacks thought. I personally wouldnt post anything unfinished. If it WERE amazing, someone could tkae it and make it their own. next thing you know. Boom. Your stuff stolen. I think you have potential. I like where your heads at with the idea. karmas not often enough talked about, and I think with some work, you could possibly write some good stuff. Might be more of a freestyle/spoken word poet, then a mc, but alot of those are interchangeable. For a good example of what your trying to do check out Saul Williams. Id keep at it man. even the bluntness of people on here shouldnt kill your dream if you want to write.

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    ill give you a 5

    #364223
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    7/10

    #364209
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    4/10…rhymed them to them 4 times to itself..
    and like the guy above, it kind of lacks thought.

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